“Wow!” I wake up in a sudden jolt. “It’s Christmas!” Presents, family, presents… DAD!!! Christmas means I get to see my dad! I jump off my top bunk scattered with blankets, waking everyone else up. “What time is it??” Everyone yells. I look sharply to the clock. “Five o’ clock…” They are going to make me go back to sleep if I tell them five, that can’t happen, no way.
Kesha
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7 comments:
that was the best thing i herd all day. great job with the five o'clock thing it was cool. try to put more detail on other things.
wow, that is a great introduction to a paper. It makes me want to read the rest of the paper... especially with the waking up so early like everyone does on Christmas.
Kelsee
I think you did a great job. the expetions were great, but next time you should make it a little longer and more details. but good job.
-joshua
It kind of sounds like you live with several people that don't like to get up early. I would have the same problem. It sounds nice when you make it feel 'matter of fact'. Stubborn. LOL
Anthony
Great start. I liked how you made it all energized right at the start. In my opinion you should add a bit more detail into it.-Noble
I really like your intro. It liked Christmas mostly because i get to see my family and we do a lot of games.
I really like it.
Tayler
haha i love Christmas. its still my favorite holiday and probably will always be.
alex
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